Malik

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Malik

Malik, I can tell that you did your research and worked hard to piece your essay together! I enjoyed reading what you have! Nice job! Unfortunately, it also feels like it cuts off abruptly and doesn't reach a resolve.

I would like it if you could put a little more time into editing this and submit for a regrade. Please see the notes on your grading rubric and access your essay at https://ha.cool to continue to work on it. Email me at ereichel@philasd.org when you have completed your revised version, and I will regrade it. Please do this by 3/29.

Proficiency Scores

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Content

You're starting to include more information in your writing, which is a good start! Keep adding more details to help your readers understand your topic better.

Organization

Your writing is becoming more organized, which is a positive step! Keep experimenting with different ways to structure your ideas for maximum clarity.

Imagery

Your writing paints some pictures, though it can be hard to understand sometimes. Keep practicing to make it clearer!

Grammar

Your grammar skills are getting better, with just a few small errors. Keep practicing to improve even more!

Syntax

You're pretty good at mixing up your sentence styles to keep things interesting. Keep trying different ways to write!

Context

You're starting to include context in your stories, which is pretty good! Keep adding more details to make your stories richer.

Focus

You're getting better at staying on topic, but sometimes you still go off track.

Grammar

Hone your grammar skills by practicing consistent application of grammar rules to enhance readability.

Elaboration

Enhance your descriptive language by adding more vivid and relevant details to captivate your reader's imagination.

Purpose

Sharpen your writing's purpose to ensure your message is explicit and focused, guiding your reader through your narrative.